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Seven

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Seven

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A sin, a song, a silent sigh,
Seven deadly songs are sung.
Softly sinking into the seven seas,
Sweet sabotage has sadly not begun.

Are we meant to drown at the hands of Avarice,
Only to find the bloodied hands were our very own?

Or will the hands of Lust strangle,
Like the demons that lay us down to sleep?

There are many whom we may Envy,
But none do we Envy more than potential in us lost.

With Wrath we wish to burn all those who cross our path,
But at the end we alone burn, for Wrath destroys only its parent.

Does our hedonistic Gluttony have any limits?
Or are we doomed to become Gluttons in body and soul?

Sloth capriciously creeps into the cracks of our being,
Until our minds have been completely consumed, leaving vacuum.

Vanity gives us the illusion of floating higher than all,
But when falling, we feel the greatest pain as we softly touch the ground.

A sin, a song, a silent sigh,
Seven deadly songs are sung.
Softly sinking into the seven seas,
Sweet sabotage has sadly not begun.

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The above has been posted for Thursday Poets’ Rally Week 27, hosted by Jingle.

Like I promised earlier, I’d still post this one. As for an update on the previous post, I think I will be back sooner than I thought. At least I find it terribly hard to stay away from writing and blogging. Hopefully that terrible empty dead feeling goes away, it’s the only thing holding me back. One death is bad enough, a second is unbearable!

Also, if it is not too much trouble for you kind bloggers, please check out my photography blog. I might continue to update that, provided I go out and take photographs. Here’s the link: Ripples Through this Imagination.

All the best to everyone!

97 thoughts on “Seven”

    1. Thank you Sid. As for the picture, I couldn’t find a better picture to display all the seven sins. Thought it wouldn’t do justice to the poem if I displayed a picture with only one.

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  2. My my my!! What an ode to the seven deadly sins!! Very very darkly and beautifully done… And it actually even LOOKS like a tree (of sins)… I think, after Shadows, this one totally blew me away!!
    There are very good poems, and then there are absolutely STUNNING ones, like this!!!

    Bravo, my dear!

    I checked some your clicks on the other blog, and wow! You really are multi-talented!! Now I am inspired to put up some of my random clicks as well… some day maybe 🙂

    Ciao.. and take care.. 🙂 Will miss ya.. (hopefully for not too long.. and you very well know what I mean by that ;))

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    1. Thanks Kavita. I’ve been working on this one for a very very long time, but finally decided it needs to be put up. I am still not completely satisfied with it, but I like this version better than all the previous ones. I find is surprising that you like this so much, but it gives me a great boost in confidence as now I’m not longer unsure about it. 😀

      Thank you for visiting my other blog. Glad you liked the photographs. I am just a beginner though, so still in the experimental phases. Doing my best to read and experiment, photography is like a second love to me (writing being the first).

      And do put up your pictures, would love to see! Will eagerly wait for you to put them up 😀

      Take care, and I’ll keep visiting, so don’t worry about that! And I think I’ll be back soon enough, true love cannot be parted, so writing is as good as a vital organ in my body 😛

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  7. I love how the seven deadly sins are weaved together in such imagery and texture. It evoked the feeling of human weakness and also the futility of falling into their temptations.

    Loved this great piece of work. Bravo!

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  10. Wow…this is a fantastic ode to the seven deadly sins…dark and I am blown away by your talent. You leave me speechless every single time…don’t stay away too long…will miss you!! I love your other blog. Hugs my friend xx

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    1. Aww thanks Amanda, I was really unsure about this piece. It is very unlike anything I have written.

      And I don’t think I’ll be away too long now, hopefully! I am itching to be back! 😀

      Hugs to you too!

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  11. seven deadly sing seems vivid after reading your piece 🙂 its so dark… don’t wanna commit it but enjoyed reading it 🙂
    you are an amazing poet…

    keep versing!!

    viva la vida 🙂

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  13. brilliant is the word 🙂
    it was awessommeeeee…..

    loved the alliterating start and end and the 7 deadly sins captured well 🙂
    i m now at loss of words to express the beauty..
    jus a doubt is this a form of poetry..??

    here from Jingle’s Rally.. u can read my poem at

    ~::~ FootPrints ~::~

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    1. Thanks for reading! I am really glad you liked it.

      As for your doubt, nope, this isn’t any form of poetry. I rarely follow any forms, I just write as I please. 🙂

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  15. Thanks for this. I often think about and write of the seven deadly sins and I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. Thank you for sharing. Be Inspired Today! Love and Light, Sender

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  19. This si a fantastic piece of Poetry/Prose I love your style for this. I have several pieces I have done using the same approach on not the seven deadly sins (very original)I have always been apprehensive about sharing them because this style can often be misunderstood, it is very sophisticated. I just really enjoyed this very much1

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    1. Thanks a lot Amanda! Glad you liked it. It took me a long time to write this one, and still I am unsure about it. It is fun writing like this though. Do share your work, irrespective of style, I’m sure it will be understood.

      Thanks for visiting!

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  27. One of the things I hope to write on is the seven deadly sins. I haven’t gotten to that yet. I enjoyed the alliteration. The repetition of the “s” was a nice touch. While I read through your poem I kept thinking of Dante’s inferno. This definitely drew me in.

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  28. I am a sucker for alliteration. You won me with your first four lines and again with Sloth. I really like the way you tackled every sin, as delicate as the picture you have allowing just two lines to say it all. My favorite out of all of the seven was

    There are many whom we may Envy,
    But none do we Envy more than potential in us lost.

    No matter how many revisions you did, this is one is great. No need to rethink anything it is quite great just the way it is.

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    1. Thanks splashofexpression, this was my first attempt at writing an alliteration. Glad you enjoyed it.

      I just got fed up of doing revisions, and I guess I liked this version enough. Now I like it even more!

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  50. “Does our hedonistic Gluttony have any limits?”

    easily my favorite line from the poem. Depending on how you read it and where you put the emphasis leaves a lot of room for interpretation. Overall, loved the poem. Guess I’m not alone in enjoying this one!

    crb.

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